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Shameless self promotion of the evening.

For any iPad users who happen to frequent this blog, I have an announcement.

Well, it’s something I’ve mentioned before, but every now and again I like to poke everyone with a reminder.

Anyway, for all my followers and readers, if you buy books for your iPad, guess what!

The Adventures Of Black Mask & Pale Rider - http://itun.es/iPz35Z #iTunes

My first book, the Adventure of Black Mask & Pale Rider, is available for iPad through the iTunes store.

Unfortunately, there’s a few … things that have to be done in order to get Kindle versions of the book.  I’m working on that, and most likely will have a free download available in the future.


Black Mask & Pale Rider – rewriting the adventures

As I began to write Rocket Fox, I thought back to Black Mask and Pale Rider.  I came to the realization that I’d need to do some updating on that tale as well.  And that might very well extend a great deal of it.  I had hummed and hawed about how to start it.  One start would see the pair of elven gunslingers returning to their homeworld only to be arrested for misusing the gates between worlds.  The ensuing trial would be a retelling of their entire time on Earth.  The other idea would be much more tranquil, as the story would begin in Brockton during the festival, and at the urging of several children, Shani and Pania would tell the tale of the Civil War, and their wild ride between the Union and the Confederacy.

I decided to settle upon the latter, and came up with this to start it all off.

The Brockton Festival. A time of celebration in the town of Brockton. A two week long festival, celebrated twice a year in spring and once again as autumn arrives. It ushers in two very important rituals. The first in spring heralds the beginning of seeding and planting for the farmers in the district, and at the same time it says good-bye to the students of the Brockton Academy of the Arts, the prestigious school that elves from across the continent come to learn writing, painting, music and how to weave their magic with it properly. In the fall, it is the celebration of the harvest and welcoming the new students to the school. It’s said that centuries before the first elves to settle the town held a grand celebration, although much to the chagrin of the local farming area. But they opened their arms in friendship to the farmers to come celebrate with them. This action forged a feeling of peace at the time of the festival. It also is an honoured tradition that no fighting of any kind would be tolerated. To do so, would bring about a lifetime ban to those who took part in such debauchery.

On this day, the opening day of the festivities, most elves were just getting their first tastes of the different cultures and music that spanned the continent. There was the food brought in from the desert elves near Semerkhet. The stories and song from the elves of the Messewan Valley. The magical arts from the elves of the Mysterian Marshes. And the acts of strength and stamina from the hardy and tall elves of the Nordician Mountains. Travelers came from far and wide to partake in the festivities, some with performances of their own, others just merely to watch the different performances and partake in the food and drink.

One elf in particular was feeling more toward the latter. Pania Alow, a beautiful young elf of 325 had her moment on the stage, having once been a student of the Academy. At one time, she had marveled audiences with her song and dance on the stage. Today, however, she felt more at home mingling and being a part of the audience. This did not stop her family from having their own tent among all the dignitaries that set up camp on the grounds of the festival. It had become tradition for the Alows to have their own spot among the others who would set up camp. Her father, Karl, would chronicle the events for the local newspaper, while her mother, Titania would assist with the production of one of the main stage plays. Her brother, Mandrel would always tell tales to enrapture the ladies. And though she was still very, very young, Pania’s younger sister Pylia would hover near her mother, and help out where she could with the stage play.

As Pania walked past the tents and displays that lined the many pathways of the festival, she was joined by another elf. A tall, lanky woman, with jet black hair and tanned skin as though she spent a good deal of her life in the sun. A stark contrast to Pania’s own fair skin and blond hair. The woman was Shani Wennemein, and even though the pair had differences in gait, in dress and in fashion, one could tell they were friends and partners.

“Did ya hear?” Shani drawled slowly as she matched Pania’s pace. “The Muharane ‘re gonna have their sword dancin’ set up this afternoon. I hear tell they put on a skilled show.” She took an apple from her long coat pocket as they walked, slicing off a piece with a small dagger and fed some to a small wyrmling that perched on her shoulder. “I were gonna take thet in later. How ’bout you?”

“I did,” Pania replied with a smile, her voice soft and smooth. “I’d planned on takin’ in the performance later meself. Mayhap even speak to ‘em an’ see if they’ll show me some o’ their stances.”

“They use scimitars, though,” Shani said as she sliced off another piece of apple and gobbled it down. “You use a rapier. Diff’rent kinda weapon.”

“True,” Pania replied with a nod. “But the principles o’ each stance can be translated, if done properly.” The pair continued to walk, discussing the different displays, vendors and shows that had been scheduled for the first day. All too much to take in at once, a good thing the festival was a two week affair. Eventually, their slow walk had brought them to the entrance of the Alow tent. They both continued to talk about the schedule of events as Pania pushed back the entrance flap to walk inside.

As they both entered the ornate tent, they stopped talking. Inside, which was quite large for it had to be to house five elves during this two week event, there sat several elven children. Pania did a quick head count. There had to be at least thirty that had taken seats here and there throughout the tent. In the middle of them all was Pania’s young sister Pylia, only a child herself. “Mother,” Pania called out as Pylia raced to meet her sister, grinning with glee as she hugged Pania’s leg.

From the back of the tent, an older elf, though still with her own grace and beauty appeared. Titania Alow, respected as one of the most acclaimed entertainers throughout Brytalonia, her performances were known far and wide. Her blond hair done up in curls, much like Pania’s own hair, though Titania’s manner of dress was different from her daughter’s, it was still elegant nonetheless. “Word has spread, my wee daughter, about the adventure the pair o’ ye took through the gates b’tween worlds.” She smiled a coy smile as she rested her hands on her hips. “An’ as everyone knows, that is a feat not done in over four hundred years.”

Pania nodded and smiled as she looked to the faces of all the children, all of whom were looking back with great anticipation. How could one turn aside such faces without them hearing a tale of adventure and triumph.

“Well, I guess I’ll see ya at the sword dancin’ later,” Shani said as she began to open the tent flap and let herself out. Her progress was halted, however, as she felt a firm grip on the sleeve of her long coat. She looked back, and took note that Pania had an iron grip on her arm. “Um…”

“It’s a point o’ fact that it were more ‘n me what went through the gates b’tween worlds,” Pania said as she looked to Shani with a coy smile that matched her own mother’s. “An’ any story worth it’s salt, an’ one as grand as this would need two ta tell it properly.” Shani just stared at Pania for a moment, finally sighing reluctantly and muttering a fine as she walked through the sea of children toward a long couch at one wall of the tent. As Shani took off her long coat and set her stetson on the couch, the children caught sight of a pair of the items that the two elves brought back with them from the other world. A pair of simple pistols, slung in their holsters and hanging low on Shani’s hips. As the lanky elf took her seat, the wyrmling crawled down to nestle himself comfortably in Shani’s lap.

Pania knelt down as she turned to her sister and spoke, signing with her hands as she did so. “Would you help mother an’ get some refreshments for everyone, please?” she asked with a pleasant smile. Pylia nodded and signed back before she ran off to the back of the tent. Pylia wasn’t deaf, if the truth be known. She just couldn’t speak. But the Alow family took it upon themselves to always sign whenever they spoke to her. Pania finally rose to her feet and removed the long cloak that hung at her shoulders. As she did there was a small peep that came from her collar, and a tired pixie walked onto Pania’s shoulder, stretching as though she’d just awakened from a long nap. “We have company, Verit,” Pania said to the pixie. Verit stopped and looked around, seeing all of the faces. For a moment she was caught off guard and slightly embarrassed, but eventually, she perched lightly on Pania’s shoulder and offered a wave to all in the tent.

Pania took a seat beside Shani, her own pistols now on display as well. She leaned forward just a bit and smiled to the children who looked back with anticipation of the story to come. “Well now, if it’s a story that ye want, it’s a story that ye will have. Another world, another place, diff’rent people an’ diff’rent situations. But in a way, familiar ta what we know.” She looked over to Shani as she spoke, the eyes of the children following as they looked over to the tall, lanky, elven gunslinger. “For me, it all began in a place called Chicago. But for Shani here, it all started in a place called Carrollton, Arkansas.” She looked back to the children with a smile. “We’ve all heard o’ stories ’bout sword an’ sorcery. Well, this one’s not much diff’rent. But instead o’ swords, this one is about six gun an’ sorcery.”


The year was 1982…

The year was 1982, I had been 12 years old all of six months.  Christmas was coming around and I had just gotten a cassette player.  A stereo cassette player as a matter of fact.  For those who don’t know, a cassette was big during the 1980s.  I had already been experimenting with recording from another tape deck.  An AM/FM radio that had a cassette player and a mic jack.  It was a Radio Shack to be precise.

The Turn of a Friendly Card

The Turn of a Friendly Card (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

1982 was also when I had spent a great deal of time down in the basement at a chalk board, and with paper, drawing up space ship designs and creating what would eventually become Rocket Fox.  Those early days I called the Vulpine the Foxians.  The limited imagination of a 12 year old.

1982 was also the year that I became introduced to the Alan Parsons Project.  That Christmas, as a matter of fact.  My mom loved it because it was very orchestral.  It took a lot of years for it to grow on me, but I still remember that first cassette tape.  The Turn of a Friendly Card.

Today when I listen to it, it doesn’t draw about images of Rocket Fox, but another work of mine.  Black Mask & Pale Rider.  Among the chords of the wild west is the mystery that is fantasy.  It is about two elven women who travel the great frontier of the North American Mid West, after all.  And while there is gun fighting and gunslinging, there is also magic slinging and mythical beasts that come into the story.  Shani and Pania, the aforementioned Black Mask & Pale Rider, are elves after all.  And they come from another world that is filled with magic.

For that, music of the type from Alan Parsons Project is quite fitting.


Elder Scrolls V Skyrim: Official Gameplay Trailer – YouTube

Elder Scrolls V Skyrim: Official Gameplay Trailer – YouTube.

Rocket Fox is taking a small break while I hunker down in a hole and play Skyrim.

Yes, I will never see the light of day AGAIN (thanks a lot Bethesda)!

On an unrelated note (yet, somewhat related), I’ve been looking through my notes for Black Mask & Pale Rider, and the journey Pania Alow (Pale Rider) takes.  At one point in the book Black Mask & Pale Rider: A Tale of Six Gun and Sorcery, Pania is approached by the goddess the Shining Lady, whom the Knights of the Order of the Scarlet Rose follow.  She informs Pania that she is on a path that no mere skald has ever walked before.  In time, Pania becomes a paladin.  But as the elves of Terra-Kal are long lived, the usual bonded mount which is often thought of as a horse wouldn’t be good enough.  An elven paladin would have to quest to find a new mount every ten years or so.

Therefore…

What if Pania’s destiny was to become bonded to a dragon.


Historical maps

Some of the maps researched for the story Black Mask & Pale Rider are slightly off in years, but as close to 1863 as could be found.  The map of Chicago, for instance, is before the Great Fire.  Carrollton is merely a dot on the map as I couldn’t find any maps of the city, and at that time, Carrollton was actually around 5 to 10 thousand in population.  Harrisburg was also difficult to find at the time, but at least it’s location was simple enough.

Carrollton, Arkansas, circa 1863

Chicago, Illinois, circa 1856

Harrisburg, Pennsylvania, circa 1870

I also did some doctoring of the maps to make them look a tad aged, and give it the feel of a map carried in a ruck sack.


New map of the world

I decided to tinker and see what I could come up with for a new map for the world of Black Mask and Pale Rider.  Or at least where Shani and Pania come from.  In time, I’ll draw up maps for Chicago, Carrolton and Harrisburg.

Click to embiggen.


Locales of Black Mask & Pale Rider: Stonebridge, Brytilona

More on the world of Black Mask and Pale Rider, this time focusing on their homeworld.

The world Shani and Pania come from is described in several languages, many of them having roots from old Earth languages.  Among the wild elves of this world, they call the planet hud y Ddaear, Nullam tellusMagie der Erde and even سحر الأرض. All of the translations mean the same thing, as they attempt to describe an Earth born of Magic.

Stonebridge is the capital and most regal of the cities of Brytilona.  It is in this region where the two main characters, Shani and Pania, come from.

Home to the Royal Palace, it is also the centerpiece of the world, and the central location of most of the guilds within Brytilona.  The Patrolers, Consolers and Magistrates all congregate here in this majestic city.

It’s streets are paved with cobble stones, with rich, finely crafted sidewalks, and immaculate buildings.  The city is also home to one of the most creative industrial areas, as air ships dock frequently to bring supplies from far off places such as Semerkhet and even the Meharaine city of Drakken.

While Stonebridge is a city of wealth, it is not without it’s slum areas.  In darkened corners that many of the upper class would like to forget about, these slums hide the downtrodden and criminal.  Often the Knights who make up the Patrolers will make weekly raids of the slums in order to find any squatters and criminals.

Stonebridge is also a city known for it’s towers and it’s bridges.  Built on the Messewan River, the city has eight bridges that cross the mighty waters, and the towers seem to reach up to the sky.  The main industry of this city is mixed between agriculture, tourism, commerce, industry and arcanum.

As a side note, the city of Stonebridge was inspired by the city of Saskatoon.  The Bridge City, as it is nicknamed, has a large number of bridges that span the South Saskatchewan River the city rests on.


Locales of Black Mask & Pale Rider: Carrollton, Arkansas

While Pania encounters life in the city of Chicago, Illinois, Shani winds up in a completely different place.

Carrollton, Arkansas.

In the heart of Carroll Country, bordering Missouri, Carrollton is a prosperous community.  When Shani arrives, she discovers a good number of farmers, merchants, trades people, and soldiers.  The first things she learns about is the conflict between the Union and the Confederacy.  That is, after she has a long talk with a gunslinger by the name of Slowhand Johnson about the long vehicles nicknamed the Iron Horse.  Shani had never seen a train before she came to Carrollton.

Slowhand seemed helpful enough, and invites Shani to travel with him.  He, just as Shani becomes, is a bit of an outcast.  People don’t associate with Johnson because of two reasons; he’s a gunslinger who makes his living collecting bounties and because he’s black.  The latter has gotten him into trouble with slave runner who thought he was an escaped slave.  In fact, he was a slave, but at the age of 19 his master set him free of his own accord.  He could have left the territory, but remained on a small ranch where he has some chickens and a small garden, just on the outskirts of Carrollton.  People in Carrollton leave him alone, for the most part.  They don’t necessarily like him, but they do trust him as he often will assist in some small labour force when construction is needed, or with the local fire brigade.

Shani learns about southern life in Carrollton, and learns about how people treat slaves, both bad and good.  Although, she can’t necessarily see what good there can be from having a slave.  Many of her questions are directed to Slowhand, who often seems a bit annoyed by the constant questioning.

It is in Carrollton that Shani acquires her accent, to help hide her stutter.  She also acquires her knowledge as a gunslinger.


Locales of Black Mask & Pale Rider: Chicago, Ill.

The main characters are set.  Naturally, there will be several secondary characters throughout the story, but we don’t need to go through those at this point in time.  But like any story, there are the locales.  Places where the characters will go.  The first is Chicago, Illinois.

Chicago was founded as a town in 1833 near a portage between the Great Lakes and the Mississippi Watershed.  By the 1860s, Chicago had a population of around 125,000, which made it a pioneering city on the edge of the frontier, but also a bustling center for trade and commerce.

It is here where Pania arrives, playing the role of an actress from Europe looking for a theatre company to join.  She manages to find one, and manages to find a place to stay at a boarding house (which also happens to house a brothel).  Being the adventurous sort, Pania dresses in her finery during the day as she explores the city and takes part in the theatre production that hires her, and during the evening, she wears her more comfortable gear and explores the city from a different view.  It is here that she learns of the treatment of Native Americans, the Underground Railroad, and the history of this nation she has come upon.

Pania makes her home in a section of Chicago called Bridgeport.  On the edge of this section is a small theatre attempting to make a go of it, but the land it rests on happens to be coveted by an industrialist that wishes to add to his holdings.  The boarding house and brothel also resides close by, and is also coveted land by this same industrialist.

As Bridgeport is on the edge of the city, Pania has a chance to not only explore much of Chicago that permits, but she also has the opportunity to explore the surrounding countryside.  It is here that she discovers the stage coach routes and the trade routes leading into the city.  Small in comparison to the port routes on the edge of the Great Lakes.


Character Building: Captain Samuel Williams

Previously, I went over some of the main characters of the rewrite to Black Mask & Pale Rider.  Those were looked at as the “heroes” of this tale, which is really kind of off as a description as there are no heroes, nor are there any villains.  At least, not in the first book.  Now, to look at the main antagonist, the one who will chase Shani and Pania across the States.

Captain Samuel Williams is a United States Cavalry officer.  He is dedicated to his duties and does not question his orders if he feels they are fair and presented to him without deception.  A veteran of the Battle of Antietam in Maryland, Williams proved his loyalty to the Union.  Although the Civil War continued, the President had his sights set on expansion west, and there were unsavoury characters that needed to be taken in to allow this to happen.  Two of those included the outlaws known as Black Mask and Pale Rider.

Williams was informed that these two were seen as agitators.  Pale Rider would rob stage coaches, hold up law abiding citizens in broad daylight, and it was even reported she had killed a United States Marshal.  Black Mask was a bank robber, a cutthroat, a brigand.  She was also a gunslinger, and word had spread about her kill count in street fights.  Williams was ordered to use whatever resources he had to bring these two to justice.  But they were to be brought in alive and made an example of.

Williams was a law abiding man.  He knew that word of these two was unsettling to many along the Eastern seaboard.  Their capture would help to ease tensions, allow for Western expansion, and even ensure that the British Territories to the north would not look to starting a fight with the Union.  The Union and the Confederacy were both vulnerable to outside sources thanks to their own internal conflict.

A good judge of character, Williams hand picked his men.  Some had served under him in the past.  Others were new recruits that he had heard good things about.  Once they were together, they would make their way west to Chicago, where Pale Rider had been rumoured to be holed up.  His plan was to capture Pania first, then head south to the border States and seek some assistance in capturing Shani and whomever she might be allied with.

Williams stands a good six feet two inches tall, is an accomplished rider and rifleman.  When he speaks, his words are measured and very well thought out, even during tense situations.  He has shoulder length sandy blonde hair that is kept neat and clean, just as he does with everything in his life.  Even while serving in action, he managed to find time to keep his uniform presentable.  Williams is a man who pays a great deal of attention to detail.


Casting Call

The casting call is up!  No, not actors I think would play the characters if ever Black Mask & Pale Rider became a movie (though, that would be fun to dream about) but the list of character descriptions of the different characters met in the story.  I’ll have a few more as time goes on, including Captain Samuel Williams, United States Cavalry Officer charged with hunting down the pair of dangerous gunslingers.

Cast of Characters


Character Building: Shani Wennemein

Previously discussed Pania, Slowhand, Arella, Scales and Verit.  Now, it’s time for the other star of the series, Shani Wennemein.

Shani can best be described as a cautious, yet curious elf.  While she is cautious, she can also be a tad bold and head strong as well.  This may come from her dragon blooded heritage.

She is a quick learner, often observing how things work and figuring it all out in her head.  This reason alone is why she becomes such an expert gun hand.  Her confidence is somewhat off, however, thanks to the small stutter she has.  This stutter gets worse when she is nervous.  Thanks to her association with Slowhand Johnson, she manages to become less nervous in the new world she discovers.  Also, thanks to her exploration of the town of Clinton, Arkansas where she first arrives, she acquires an uncommon accent for her kind.

Shani’s skin is a pale white, which makes her look deathly sick.  Especially when her facial features are framed with her long, raven black hair.  But upon closer inspection, one might find that her skin is actually covered in very tiny scales, which almost gives her a reflective look.  To fit in with the world around her, she uses a small amount of make up to give her a bit of colour.  After a while, however, she decides against using it, especially when she begins riding constantly between towns.

Shani stands at five feet, one inch tall, and while she appears thin, she is quite strong as well as being incredibly agile.  Her lithe fingers prove she’s good with springing a lock, which she seems she can almost see the inner mechanism with her wide, hazel eyes.

She catches local lingo quite easily, and manages to create her own sayings, which many find rather humourous.  Shani might be rather rough and tumble, but it’s merely part of her nature.  She enjoys a challenge, and finds that sometimes a larcenous action is just to see if she can pull it off.  Shani is, to put bluntly, a thief.  Though, she will state her intentions are more akin to a rogue, someone with adventuresome spirit, and her services are often used to aid many to increase their own security.  Most would point out that others do this with the individuals permission, whereas Shani will simply state she acts in a proactive manner.


Character Building: Pania Alow

Yesterday, I introduced two of the secondary characters to the rewrite for Black Mask & Pale Rider as well as Shani’s companion, Scales. Today, I detail one of the main characters of the story. Pania Alow, a.k.a. Pale Rider.

Pania Alow is, at the time of the story, a young elf (young being relative to elves, as she is 325 years old) with an adventuresome spirit, an opportunistic outlook and a warm heart. She comes from a family of artists, bards, story tellers and singers. She stands about 4 feet 10 inches tall, about average height for an elf, long, blond hair tucked into curls that seem to frame her sharp tipped ears. She always seems to have a smile on her face like she has some secret. Her green eyes help to draw anyone directly to them as she would converse with any other individual. Her frame is quite curvy, though athletic.

Pania has a style for fashion, choosing to wear whatever might be trendy at the time. She does have her favourites, though, such as her attire when she knows that she must face some sort of danger. She will often wear a silken poet’s shirt with a tunic made of elven chain underneath. Soft leather bracers with gold inlay marking her house and her faith. A leather corset around her midsection, with a belt that holds a finely crafted rapier. Later, a pair of leather holsters would be added, holding a well cared for pair of Smith and Wesson Army .32s. Her slacks are made of comfortable cotton, fitting to her form as though hugging her hips. She wears a pair of leather thigh high boots, with side buckles and spurs at each heel. This is topped off with a finely crafted cloak that rests around her shoulders, brown with gold embroidery at the edges.

Pania is very much a swashbuckler. An expert with her rapier, one might say that her form and fighting stance may have been studied later in life by the likes of Errol Flynn. While better with a blade, she knows how to use her pistols, able to combine the practice of sword and pistol in her ability to fight. But that is not all in her arsenal, for she is a sorceress. At first, when she arrives on Earth, she believes the planet to be dead of magic and worries for her companion, Verit. But eventually, she realizes the magic isn’t dead, just laying dormant. Pania is able to draw upon the arcane to heal and harm, to free and confine. Often she uses these abilities to tell a good tale or sing a song, adding an entertainment value to a possible historic tale of adventure.

When she arrives on Earth, one of her first goals is to find the Underground Railroad. She does not understand how humans could own other humans, and she sympathizes with those who would abolish slavery. Unknown to her, these steps she takes put her on a road she never believed she would see.


Character Building: Arella Dorchester

Fourth in a series of character descriptions for the rewrite of Black Mask & Pale Rider.  This fourth installment: Madam Arella Dorchester.

As the name suggests, Arella Dorchester is the owner of a frontier bordello.  When she first meets Pania Alow, she has a brothel and boarding house that she owns over a tavern on the outskirts of Chicago.  It is here that Pania learns a great deal about this red headed southern belle.

Arella runs a clean establishment, and the money she brings in is used to ensure her girls get any and all medical attention that they need.  Doctors will often take note of the fact that Arella has a number of African American girls in her employ.  Often, she’ll make up one excuse or another, but as Pania finds out, Arella is playing a dangerous game.  Her boarding house and brothel is a way station in the Underground Railroad.

As mentioned before, Arella has all the mannerisms of a true southern belle.  She comes by it honestly, born into a southern family, she was destined to be a fine lady, and had caught the attention and the eye of many a many in her home of Atlanta.  Arella was much more firm in her own opinion, however, an aspect that got her into many an argument with her mother.  Eventually, Arella left Atlanta, but she didn’t leave alone.  She had met a Yankee when the Confederacy separated from the Union, and together, they made a plan to join up with the Railroad.  They learned everything they could.  They even had a short relationship that ended when he was killed by a band of bounty hunters looking for escaped slaves.

Eventually, Arella settled in Chicago and opened her boarding house.  Which is what it is officially known as.  It is here where Pania meets Arella, and the two have a whirlwind of an affair.  At the outset, Arella, and her girls, know of Pania as a stage show performer.  Until one night that the figure of Pale Rider needs assistance.

The bordello and Arella help Pania, but eventually, thanks to the law tightening regarding brothels, Arella and her girls have to leave.  As does Pania.

Arella is an older woman, in her forties, but has all the charm and beauty of someone years younger.  Her charm is backed up by wisdom and experience.  Arella knows how to handle a gun quite well, having needed to do so while traveling under cover of darkness, guiding escaped slaves to new found freedom.  She is extremely protective of the girls in her care, and will not tolerate any mistreatment at all.


Character Building: Verit

I did this with Swift Fox, and maybe it’ll help with the rewrite for Black Mask & Pale Rider as well.  Pania and Shani remain essentially the same, however, I will put up character descriptions of them as well.  For now, here’s Verit.

Simply put, Verit is a pixie.  A fairy.  A member of the fae folk, and completely and totally a being of magic.  Verit stands about 4 inches tall.  Pretty tall for a pixie, really.  Which might have something to do with her attitude.  While around Pania she is curious and happy, and even sometimes gets herself into trouble, around her own kind she’s seen as an outsider.

She has pale skin which glows a soft white, not any of the vibrant colours that others of her kind might.  Raven black hair, dark but large eyes that are a deep blue in colour, and even her delicate wings are framed in black.  Many thought she was not good enough to assist any of the mages within the towers of Stonebridge, or with the prestigious Arcanum Bridge Academy.  Eventually, however, Verit found herself in the care of, what she at first considered a bit of a flighty sorceress.  Verit’s first impressions were off regarding Pania, because Pania seemed more bardic than one who would require the services of a familiar.   But as Verit soon learned, Pania was an adventuresome sort, and one who would often chronicle these adventures in large tomes.  At first, Verit wondered why Pania had such a huge library, when it held no tomes of magical spells or long held arcane knowledge.  It was more like a library of adventure stories and local histories.  After Verit had been with Pania for a year, she finally grew courageous enough to ask Pania if she could read the many tomes within the library.  Taken aback, Pania did agree, and often would help Verit pick out her books so she could read at Pania’s writing desk.  The same work area that Verit would ensure was tidy and organized.

You see, Verit wasn’t like other pixies.  Her physical appearance wasn’t the only reason why she was seen as an outsider, but also the fact that she was well read.  That she could read.  Not many pixies could read, and even fewer had a grasp on four different elven languages.  Verit did, however.  And it was a skill that Verit often would help Pania with.

Eventually, Verit began to accompany Pania on her adventures, keeping herself perched up on Pania’s shoulder, holding onto the cloth of Pania’s cloak as they would travel.  It was during these times that Verit proved even more valuable.  Like all pixies, Verit has a curious nature.  This curious nature has allowed her to spot warning signs of danger, look out for man made traps and even spring locks that are difficult to get past.

Verit even proves that she is a quick learner, and will often listen to Pania’s opinions, and others, to the point where she has started to develop her own philosophy on the world around her.  Pania does not keep her as a servant.  Verit has full control of her own movements throughout Pania’s house, but always stays close to Pania when they adventure.

Pania feels very protective of Verit, and in a way, Verit very protective of Pania.


Turn the Page

I’m currently plotting and planning the rewrite and additions to Black Mask and Pale Rider.  There will be quite a few changes taking place, but the core of the story remains the same; two elven women who find gateways to Earth from their own world and go on to become notorious gunslingers.

Some of the additions will include:

  • Pania’s pixie, Verit, will become a part of the story.
  • Shani will have mentioned once or twice she is born of dragon blood.
  • A lead up that’s more extensive, before Shani and Pania meet each other.
  • Shani stutters, but overcomes this by “acquiring” an Arkansas accent and talking more like her Earth born mentor, Slowhand Johnson.
  • Pania first appears in Chicago, and helps a theatre company begin to take a foothold.
  • Pania hears about the Underground Railroad, after seeing the treatment of former slaves.  She takes on her nom de plume, Pale Rider, and acts like a highwayman, stealing from stage coaches of those affluent individuals who can afford it.
  • Shani is disgusted by the treatment of the Native Americans and becomes an 1860’s version of Robin Hood, stealing from stage coaches and banks and giving what money she can to the Natives.
  • The way the story comes about will change as well.  Pania won’t be writing a novel one hundred years later, instead, Shani and Pania arrive back on their homeworld after the events on Earth and are confronted by their families as to their whereabouts for the past two years.

Once all of that happens, the story will move to them both meeting outside of Harrisburg, Pennsylvania.  And that’s just the first book.  Yes, the book I wrote is going to become more like … seven.

So what’s that got to do with the song?  Well, like the title of my wordpress blog (and my tumblr for that matter), Turn the Page is rather inspiring.  This is one of two songs that have the title, Turn the Page.  The other is from Blind Guardian.  Turn the page is like the changing of one’s life, as a new chapter begins.  Like reading a book.  Which is very much the core of Pania Alow, one of the main characters of Black Mask & Pale Rider.

The book I wrote will still be available, I’m not taking it off the market.  But I felt this book needed to be rewritten in a way that I felt would be more complete.  For copies of that, check out lulu.comAmazon.com (which must have been so confused by the genre of western/fantasy that they placed it in science fiction), or just cruise over to the book section of my blog.  Hey, it would make an awesome Christmas gift.  You can even buy it for the Apple iPad through the ibook store.

At some point, I might do the same with Canyons of Steel.


Mary Sue, who are you!

This actually was posted originally on my tumblr blog, but I believe it bears repeating here.  The discussion involves what exactly is a Mary Sue.  There seems to be a huge double standard with regard to how they are perceived.

Male power fantasies, in essence, a strapping young lad, with chiseled good looks, unfailing wit and charm, and can do no wrong, seems to be considered the norm.  Take those same qualities, however, and apply them to a female power fantasy (yes, they exist, women have power fantasies as well) and suddenly it becomes a Mary Sue.  A trope.  Even if one takes all the positives seen in someone who is feminine, translate those into how that person gains their incredible power, and it’s still seen as a trope or a Mary Sue.  Take all the male aspects and use the positives to describe how he gains his abilities?  Well, that’s just good writing.

Here’s a prime example that I shall pluck from the discussion.  This was originally posted by adventuresofcomicbookgirl on tumblr, but I liked this one description she gave of a female character that many would call out as a Mary Sue.

So, there’s this girl. She’s tragically orphaned and richer than anyone on the planet. Every guy she meets falls in love with her, but in between torrid romances she rejects them all because she dedicated to what is Pure and Good. She has genius level intellect, Olympic-athelete level athletic ability and incredible good looks. She is consumed by terrible angst, but this only makes guys want her more. She has no superhuman abilities, yet she is more competent than her superhuman friends and defeats superhumans with ease. She has unshakably loyal friends and allies, despite the fact she treats them pretty badly.  They fear and respect her, and defer to her orders. Everyone is obsessed with her, even her enemies are attracted to her. She can plan ahead for anything and she’s generally right with any conclusion she makes. People who defy her are inevitably wrong.

The reactions would be, invariably, that the character is such a Mary Sue.  However, if you look closely at the above description, adventuresofcomicbookgirl just finished describing the back story for Batman.  For men, this is normal, to have these reaffirming power fantasies set before them, but for women, it’s not normal, and in many cases there are those who say such power fantasies are dangerous.  Unhealthy.  But why not, why can’t women have their own power fantasies, giving proper role models to young women and girls everywhere.  They have just as much right to have such stories as the other half of the human population on the planet Earth do.

To read the entire conversation, just open up adventuresofcomicbookgirl‘s thread and start reading.  Below is my own take on it, as added to the thread of discussion.

I actually got an email over a year ago, regarding the serial series I posted called Black Mask & Pale Rider.  One of my characters, Pania, got called a Mary Sue.  Which, at first I found hilarious, considering the fact that I’m a guy.  And from what I am familiar with of the concept of Mary Sue is that such a character is similar to a self insertion.  If I were to do that, then I’d be crafting a male character.  But anyway, more to the point…

Pania Alow is quite feminine.  She’s a singer and a dancer, and the latter she uses to help with her sword play.  She comes from a family that is incredibly interested in discovering the history of a culture through their stories.  Not to recreate them or write their own songs about them, but to simply learn about them.  Pania herself tries very hard to view each person as a unique individual, though there are times she will formulate an opinion on face value.  She’s a very attractive woman, curvy and sensuous, with a playful smile and a knowing look in her eyes.  She likes fine fashion in her clothing, but attempts to mix it with practicality.  She’s also a lesbian, and rather vocal about it, so much so that her partner in crime, Shani Wennemein, has to remind her of the stigma that people in 1863 Earth view on “oddities” they may find.  Pania is a helpful person, sacrificing her own needs for the needs of others, more often than not.

There’s a great deal more to Pania than just that.  But even with all of that, Pania ended up being called a Mary Sue.  As if using that for an insult.  Now that I’ve read this, though, the only response I can now come up with is sure.  If Pania is viewed as a Mary Sue, what I would consider to be a positive role model for a young woman, then by all means.  Pania is intelligent, understanding, helpful, attractive, not afraid of her sexuality, and eager to learn all she can.  At the same time, she can be judgmental, quick to anger, sometimes headstrong, forcefully opinionated, and a bit of a tease.  She has as many faults as she has positive abilities.

If those are qualities of a Mary Sue, then I guess they just happen to be.


Cowboy proverbs

An excellent selection of cowboy proverbs, that I think at some point, I’ll have Shani Wennemein from Black Mask & Pale Rider say in future stories.

Never squat with your spurs on.

Careful as a naked man climbin’ a barbed wire fence.

Timing has a lot to do with the outcome of a rain dance.

If you get to thinkin’ you’re a person of some influence, try orderin’ somebody else’s dog around.

If you find yourself in a hole, the first thing to do is stop digging.

Never kick a cow chip on a hot day.

The biggest troublemaker you’ll probably ever have to deal with watches you shave his face in the mirror every morning.

Don’t interfere with something that ain’t bothering you none.

Always drink upstream from the herd.


Things I’ve learned about life and writing

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I originally posted this yesterday on my tumblog, but I think it bears repeating here.

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Cover of Supergirl

I felt I should make this comment, considering there’s a large discussion currently going up on my dash (yes, Snowy, I blame you, but not in a bad way).  Said discussion can be followed here, here, and here.  It deals with sexism and trans* bigotry in fan fiction, which can also be used as a discussion for original speculative fiction.  Writing fiction, fan fiction or otherwise, has the same basic elements to story creation.  In speculative fiction (such as like my own book, Black Mask & Pale Rider, and the current work I’m writing with the Barrow’s Revenge), many times you are creating your own world, or, in the case of Peter David writing a Star Trek novel or the Supergirlcomic series, creating a new series of events for established characters.  In the latter, the author has been asked to create this or has pitched an idea to the publisher that holds the rights to publishing such works.  With fan fiction, the author is writing established character, merely for enjoyment for themselves and others in the fandom.  The basic aspects of writing either are implied here, such as correct grammar, spelling, sentence structure, plot, and even characterization.But there’s another aspect that does not involve basic writing skills.  That aspect involves impact upon the reader.

People read shit.  Lots of shit!  They even read my shit!  And because of that, as authors, we have a really big responsibility to ensure that things we write are going to have an all encompassing feeling for everyone.

Having said that, there is something that should be pointed out to the fans.  Stories are going to have racist/sexist/bigoted people in them.  It’s a part of life (even though I wish it wasn’t), and often times these characters are portrayed as “the bad guy”.

Bad guys don’t just wear black hats and have handlebar mustaches.  They often act like douchebags, mistreat women, say unthinkable things about people of colour, and in general act with no regard for their words or actions.

To authors, this can be a device you can use in any story to convey to the reader who the bad guy is, or to convey a point where someone might rise above their current views of the world around them.  To fan fiction writers, however, this is played out in a much more delicate manner.

Pania Alow of Black Mask & Pale Rider

Characters in fan fiction already have a set view of the world based on what has come before.  For example, it creates a lot of ire in fandom when a female character who is viewed as strong and independent, and typically seen as a role model, is suddenly thrust into a position of “gender norm” roles.  There has to be a reason why they are suddenly thrust into that situation, and if it was a complete about face from what they are normally seen by the readership/viewership, then it must have been extremely traumatic.  For instance, in my own book, Black Mask & Pale Rider, one of the characters happens to be gay.  Pania, a.k.a. Pale Rider, has been that way for a long, long time.  She may find certain male figures attractive, but she is sexually attracted to the same sex; female.  If someone were to write fan fiction of Shani and Pania, and suddenly Pania was married to a male and pregnant, I’d be asking “what the hell happened” because that’s a complete about face for the character.

When you’re writing a character that might make an off handed joke, whether racist, sexist, or trans* bigotry, as the narrator, you should explain this was offensive in some way.  The character might not find the comment offensive, but you can be sure as guns your readers might.

And it’s not just a matter of saying “well, if you don’t like it, don’t read it”.  As authors, we have a responsibility to educate as we story tell.  The only way that the discussions of racism, sexism, trans* bigotry, misogyny and more will end is if those who happen to make a living or enjoy the hobby of writing don’t step up and start to make the change.  Writers hold as much power as educators in that regard.


Introducing, The Barrow’s Revenge Page

You may notice at the very top of this page, among all of the links leading to the other pages which have Black Mask & Pale Rider (BM&PR), Flag on my Backpack (F.o.m.B), Canyons of Steel (C.o.S) and Blood of the Moon (B.o.t.M) that there is a new title.  T.B.R. No, that’s not a variant on To Be Announced.  It stands for The Barrow’s Revenge.  This page will contain all of the information as it gets posted of all the World Building and eventually, story parts that revolve around the Barrow’s Revenge and the star system she travels through, along with her crew.

There’s even a lovely Creative Commons license on the page now.

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The Barrow’s Revenge by Tim Holtorf is licensed under a Creative Commons Attribution-NoDerivs 2.5 Canada License.
Based on a work at taholtorf.wordpress.com.
Permissions beyond the scope of this license may be available at http://taholtorf.wordpress.com.

So, all of the information on The Barrow’s Revenge can be found in one easy to find location.


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